I want to start by saying how absolutely beautiful this IF is, I adore it. I remember reading it for the first time months ago and it was easily one of my favourites, the way you handle a child MC is incredible, the lore building flows naturally and I absolutely *LOVE* the characters and their interactions, I always find myself going back to try every dialogue option just to see them all.
I wanted to make that all clear so this wasn't taken negatively it's purely just what I noticed while starting a new playthrough. I felt that with the new update there was noticeable changes in how the MC presents themselves, the tone and some things that... just didn't make sense within the context?
*SPOILERS*
From the start, we learn we're a well-loved, sheltered kid who can be shy, kind, mean confidant and so on... but we're still a kid and we act like one in our tone, mannerisms and speech. Yet with the new update it's as though we suddenly become a much older, matured version of ourselves in the matter of a few pages. We go from a scared, traumatised kid that's locked in a cage and needs a plushie for comfort (before the update) to suddenly eloquently arguing with the Reaper leaders and talking like a much older version of us, all of which is happening in the middle of a battle surrounded by corpses and enemies. It's also stated several times that we just stand around arguing or even have time for impromptu 'lock-picking' sessions?
This isn't me saying a kid can't have drastic reactions and changes to trauma situations, it's more me saying that because the update was set during such an emotionally tense part, that the time between the older version and the new update hasn't carried the same concurrent tone or writing of a seven year old traumatized kid on a corpse filled battlefield.
It's true that there's a difference. Until now, Mc has been more passive, and now they're taking a more active role. They initiate a lot of choices. Yet I didn't feel I'd made them much more mature. It's a childish choice to want to go back to the camp, in the chaos when there's danger. Mc has a tantrum and Mickhail points it out. As for the lock-picking part, I thought Mc being so impress that they almost forgot their mission was a sign of their childish side...
Also, do you think Mc's vocabulary is too advanced?
Whatever it is in my mind. It's an act. Mc plays at being big and strong, mature, but they're going to fall apart eventually. Because yes, they are a child.
I hope you'll continue your journey with me, even if Mc seems to you a little out of character at the moment. 🥰
I can see your points on what you've said and they do make sense, especially when you have a variety of personalities your MC can take, and I 100% agree with your point about it being a childish choice to go back, I wanted to say that I felt the Plushie path really showed us that but didn't want my initial post to be too long.
I think that may be it, I know that there are certain choices to show that our MC *is* quite intelligent but for the situation they're in and at the age they are it does seem a little bit advanced, for example; “No doctor would be reckless enough to carry poison into a camp without an antidote. I may be small, but I’m not stupid. And you may not care about others, but you wouldn't risk your own life with something that dangerous.” - There's nothing wrong with that on it's own, it's a great piece of dialogue, I just think that from the way we know the MC talks, and that they're only really used to speaking to their family that it's like you said, a little too advanced, only in the way it's phrased really, I could see them saying the same thing but in a slightly less clear/mature way? If that makes sense xD
But yes! I will absolutely still be following, I adore this IF and have tons of positive things to say about it, this was just one or two that I was wondering about that's all <3
Hello! I adore this game and am really enjoying the update. I love the little family you've created, and how you write child MC. Every choice we make, even when it is clearly wrong, feels like something that makes sense for the character.
I am, however, quite sad that Telio isn't a love interest. I adore him, but I'm sure I'll love the actual love interests as well, lol.
Hello ! I didn't really expect such a reception for Telio's character, many of you were disappointed that he wasn't a Ro, unfortunately this isn't a point that will change as it wouldn't make sense for his character.
However, having a crush on him will be addressed in Chapter 3.
I hope you find your other half among the other Ros. 🥰
After replaying the game for the third time since you updated, I think I understand why everyone is so drawn to Telio. We have met one RO thus far, and our interactions with Arthur can be quite complicated. We have to be deceptive with him, at least to some degree, whereas immediately after meeting Telio he is protective of us and accepts us as a half-elf. It also actually makes a lot of sense for the MC to get heart eyes over the second child they've ever met, who helps and supports them. Especially because MC has really had friends before, and they are likely going to seek the feeling of safety Telio provides, since it appears their family is becoming increasingly separated.
Psychoanalyzing aside, all that is probably why a lot of us players fell in love with Telio. It is a testament to your writing actually, that we are so connected to our MC and are naturally leaning into and feeling our character's potential emotions.
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I want to start by saying how absolutely beautiful this IF is, I adore it. I remember reading it for the first time months ago and it was easily one of my favourites, the way you handle a child MC is incredible, the lore building flows naturally and I absolutely *LOVE* the characters and their interactions, I always find myself going back to try every dialogue option just to see them all.
I wanted to make that all clear so this wasn't taken negatively it's purely just what I noticed while starting a new playthrough. I felt that with the new update there was noticeable changes in how the MC presents themselves, the tone and some things that... just didn't make sense within the context?
*SPOILERS*
From the start, we learn we're a well-loved, sheltered kid who can be shy, kind, mean confidant and so on... but we're still a kid and we act like one in our tone, mannerisms and speech. Yet with the new update it's as though we suddenly become a much older, matured version of ourselves in the matter of a few pages. We go from a scared, traumatised kid that's locked in a cage and needs a plushie for comfort (before the update) to suddenly eloquently arguing with the Reaper leaders and talking like a much older version of us, all of which is happening in the middle of a battle surrounded by corpses and enemies. It's also stated several times that we just stand around arguing or even have time for impromptu 'lock-picking' sessions?
This isn't me saying a kid can't have drastic reactions and changes to trauma situations, it's more me saying that because the update was set during such an emotionally tense part, that the time between the older version and the new update hasn't carried the same concurrent tone or writing of a seven year old traumatized kid on a corpse filled battlefield.
It's true that there's a difference. Until now, Mc has been more passive, and now they're taking a more active role. They initiate a lot of choices. Yet I didn't feel I'd made them much more mature. It's a childish choice to want to go back to the camp, in the chaos when there's danger. Mc has a tantrum and Mickhail points it out. As for the lock-picking part, I thought Mc being so impress that they almost forgot their mission was a sign of their childish side...
Also, do you think Mc's vocabulary is too advanced?
Whatever it is in my mind. It's an act. Mc plays at being big and strong, mature, but they're going to fall apart eventually. Because yes, they are a child.
I hope you'll continue your journey with me, even if Mc seems to you a little out of character at the moment. 🥰
I can see your points on what you've said and they do make sense, especially when you have a variety of personalities your MC can take, and I 100% agree with your point about it being a childish choice to go back, I wanted to say that I felt the Plushie path really showed us that but didn't want my initial post to be too long.
I think that may be it, I know that there are certain choices to show that our MC *is* quite intelligent but for the situation they're in and at the age they are it does seem a little bit advanced, for example; “No doctor would be reckless enough to carry poison into a camp without an antidote. I may be small, but I’m not stupid. And you may not care about others, but you wouldn't risk your own life with something that dangerous.” - There's nothing wrong with that on it's own, it's a great piece of dialogue, I just think that from the way we know the MC talks, and that they're only really used to speaking to their family that it's like you said, a little too advanced, only in the way it's phrased really, I could see them saying the same thing but in a slightly less clear/mature way? If that makes sense xD
But yes! I will absolutely still be following, I adore this IF and have tons of positive things to say about it, this was just one or two that I was wondering about that's all <3
I have to admit that this particular sentence gave me a hard time. 😄
Hello! I adore this game and am really enjoying the update. I love the little family you've created, and how you write child MC. Every choice we make, even when it is clearly wrong, feels like something that makes sense for the character.
I am, however, quite sad that Telio isn't a love interest. I adore him, but I'm sure I'll love the actual love interests as well, lol.
Hello ! I didn't really expect such a reception for Telio's character, many of you were disappointed that he wasn't a Ro, unfortunately this isn't a point that will change as it wouldn't make sense for his character.
However, having a crush on him will be addressed in Chapter 3.
I hope you find your other half among the other Ros. 🥰
Thanks for your kind words.
I might not get to romance him. But he's officially my best friend for the rest of our hybrid lives. In my mind at least. xD
After replaying the game for the third time since you updated, I think I understand why everyone is so drawn to Telio. We have met one RO thus far, and our interactions with Arthur can be quite complicated. We have to be deceptive with him, at least to some degree, whereas immediately after meeting Telio he is protective of us and accepts us as a half-elf. It also actually makes a lot of sense for the MC to get heart eyes over the second child they've ever met, who helps and supports them. Especially because MC has really had friends before, and they are likely going to seek the feeling of safety Telio provides, since it appears their family is becoming increasingly separated.
Psychoanalyzing aside, all that is probably why a lot of us players fell in love with Telio. It is a testament to your writing actually, that we are so connected to our MC and are naturally leaning into and feeling our character's potential emotions.
Super super super late, but happy birthday!!! Hope you had a fulfilling and happy year, as well as having an extended life full of fortune!
Thank you 🥰